so I have been doing some research, city, names etc…and this is what I have so far.
Character race- Merrick from Aglarond
Character background- Merrick was born in the city of Aglarond, as a kid Merrick grew up with his father(Toman) and Mother(lomyriel). They raised him as best they could and had a very r was always enchanted when he watched the local mercenaries training with each other, the way they moved, the sound of the swords clashing, it fascinated him to no end.
at the age of 17 Merrick left his house and went and studied with a weapon master named ?, he worked hard and for 2 years he came to know a lot about discipline, honor and following the law as well as using common sense and patience. His favorite weapon became the Katana he practiced with it constantly, and became very proficient in it, as far as working with it for only 2 years, but Barent made sure he was familiar with most common weapons.
Barent was a old fellow and a sickness came upon him that he succumbed to despite of the healers who tried to save him, Merrick was very angry and stricken with grief, on his way home he, not paying attention, ended up in the poorer section of the city. He walked by a group of shady figures and was attacked an severely injured, and was left to die. Merrick was found by a passing patrol of guards and taken to the clerics of Ilmater where he was healed, Merrick Continues to donate and pray’s to Ilmater every chance he gets.
When he was able to leave the temple, he realized that if he wishes to continue his trade as a soldier he must seek out somebody who can train him, He hears about a large city named arabel and decides to try and learn more about his craft so that one day he can make sure people like the rogues who mugged him are stopped, to be faithful to Ilmater for saving him and to do the best he can to be a good person in all ways.
-Goals, Become a weapons master, join the watch, ?
Now obviously you can see this is turning into a app for the watch and or the wyrmguard in v5 so any suggestions, ideas or anything you can think of would be helpful...
It does sound cliche-ish at least to me, but I'm running into a bit of a block..
Zool last edited by
If you break things into paragraphs, its easier to read.
Maybe some line breaks too.
A watchman trying to limit crime isn't a goal. Putting up something in the watch that will end up helping fighting crime is one. The list of goals looks more like a wish list to me. That's my opinion though. <_<
Hmm ok I'll try to piece more together… honestly though, what would be a better goal for him, rid arabel of all crime? never going to happen, and honestly he's not in the guard, so he doesnt know what needs to be fixed...
oh and sorry zool, yep grammar/sentence structure is not my strong spot. now spelling, I'm good at that...
Edit: spread it a little bit, by events in life....easier to read.
Zool last edited by
The background is great, sounds like you know your character pretty well. The goals are lacking though to help weave an interesting story 'on screen' that's got as much in it as his past.
Become a weapon master - Ok, but why? Probably to fight crime I guess, Then again, how does he plan to become a master of his chosen weapon? Duels? well that's cool, but every adventurer duels. starting up some tournaments is good too, but it needs something more.
How about tournaments that aren't in a guildhall arena? What about adventuring out to find the most weird and wonderful creatures to learn more about using the weapon against those?
Hold the tournaments in the places those creatures are, maybe even hire a ranger to scout ahead and then take it in turns fighting each new beast until you've all gotten through the dangerous region.
There's another way to go as well, perhaps you could work to impress an NPC with some power influence and contacts, maybe they can get in touch with a weapon master, who can then train you?
Joining the watch is fine, it's the beginning of something though, not really an end goal.
Joining the watch seems like a means to an end really. Becoming commander of the watch, or at least, right hand man to the commander is more of a goal, so you can implement your own ways of enforcing the law, crack down on the kinds of criminals you want rid of most. So you'll have to take a firm stance against criminals.
I only really skim read the background, so he might not do this kind of thing, but an option would be to actually set people up for crimes, to make yourself look good. Contact the underworld and make a deal, you put their enemies in jail, so long as they can help frame them for the most heinous crimes, and then lead them into your trap.
You could also go above and beyond, seeking out the most dangerous foes of the city in their own homes, and destroying them before they even become a threat, maybe even competing with the noble houses retainers to achieve these things before them, or join with them closely, and work as a team, and get the best adventurers (maybe sourced from your tournaments?) to help make it happen.
Just some random ideas on making the goals a bit richer.
Thanks zool, REEEALY helped out…
Though, believe it or not, I had thought the whole commander thing out, including the setting them up... now the getting them in the houses, that was a good thought :D get it over with... Though I should point out..(I thought I did) that he is also a very huge believer in Ilmater(saved his life). Just a few minutes ago he just went and donated 50 gold(hope that's not meta-gaming, shouldn't be really). so if he's not in a dangerous area(or maybe in the future, on shift) then he's in robe of Ilmater... hmm to think of a goal concerning that to...